Toothache and word rage

This sentence momentarily took my mind off the fact that I am experiencing the worst pain of my life, in the form of a toothache. If I suck on ice, it abates for a few minutes, then comes back even stronger. Diane is now trying to track down a narcotic for me, which I am loathe to take.
Anyway, here is the distracting sentence: “Sam and Suzy (played by newcomers Jared Gilman and Kara Hayward, respectively)”? I mean, if you list the characters in opposite order of the actors, then you’re an idiot, and if you’re not an idiot, and you don’t think your reader is, then you don’t need “respectively.” Hack.
Orwell: If it is possible to cut a word out, always cut it out.

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